Published by Self-Published on 09/10/2019
You are cordially invited to the worst wedding of the century.
Sydney Evans is no stranger to hard work. It’s the one constant in her life. And with no family or friends to speak of it’s been easy to pour everything she has into her career as general counsel for Blackstone Holdings.
She wants for nothing. Until her boss offers her a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity. All she has to do in return is marry his good-for-nothing son.
Scott Blackstone used be a party whore. Pardon, party animal. He hasn’t been that guy in a long time though. Not since he moved to Wyoming, bought a failing cattle ranch, and turned it into a profitable business.
All is good. Until a phone call from his father threatens the quiet, simple life he’s built. Marry or lose everything. And to a woman who can’t stand him, no less. Well, Scott is not going down without a fight. He’s never going back to Manhattan. Not if he can help it.
Let’s get one thing out of the way first. I really liked You Can Have Manhattan. A lot. I really enjoy P. Dangelico’s stories and this one was no different. The majority of the rest of this is going to sound like a negative review, but I want to make it absolutely clear that it’s really not.
First, a caveat. I read an ARC, which is presumably an uncorrected proof. However, a caveat to the caveat, I received it not that long before it was released, so there’s that. My absolute biggest, most gigantic complaint with this book was the dire need that it had for an editor. I truly hope that the finished copy has been thoroughly edited and revised, because underneath is a really great story.
The sheer number of errors nearly ruined the book for me. Every time I happened upon one, it was enough to jar me out of the story, and it happened frequently. I think that the author finished writing the book, and then nobody, including her, ever read through it. I think she originally must have written the book in 3rd person POV, then changed her mind and decided she wanted it in alternating 1st person POV, and then just skimmed the book changing pronouns because there were quite a few that were missed and it was…odd. It would switch from first to third person mid-sentence, mid paragraph. It was so distracting.
There were so many grammatical errors that were likely the product of just writing and typing quickly. Such as “T-shit”. That one made me laugh out loud. But then there were repeated spelling errors like “burry” instead of “bury”.
Finally, the most frustrating though, was the absolute disregard for how things work. Like things that people should just know! And presumably every reader would. For example, at one point in the book, a character walks the other to their gate at the airport and kisses them goodbye before they board their airplane. Anybody else see the problem with this? You haven’t been allowed to go past security without a ticket, much less walk someone to their gate since 9/11! View Spoiler »Another example, the main characters sign divorce papers at one point in the story and just like that, the author declares them divorced. Last time I checked, that’s not how that works. Gotta go file them, pal. Gotta be signed off on by a judge. « Hide Spoiler
Look, I know it’s fiction. I also know that it’s an indie book. But I’ve read her other books, I know she has put out better than this. And some of the writing, especially those last two things I mentioned, felt like lazy writing. It made me angry because this book could have easily been a fantastic read. Easily a 4 or 4.5 star. It even made me tear up a couple of times! That’s a pretty incredible feat considering everything I’ve just mentioned. I’m curious if the finished copy is more polished and I truly hope it is. I’m tempted to buy the paperback, because truly I enjoyed it a lot (and I exclusively only buy physical copies of books I love), but without knowing for sure, I don’t know. If you’re going to read a P. Dangelico book, I highly recommend that you start with Wrecking Ball and go from there, then work your way to this book. As I said, there’s a very enjoyable story here, but at the risk of you being turned off to her altogether, I’d rather you start elsewhere and work your way forward. Perhaps if you fall in love with her other books the way I did, you can muddle through errors in this one if they still exist.